Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When it comes to the issue that it is a good idea to offer money for the children when them get high grade in the school by their parents, some people may agree with this idea and give us sound reasons for their beliefs. On the other hand, some other people might disagree and have different opinions. Also, those opponents may have the right to believe in that. I believe it is a good idea to offer money for the children by their parents when they get high grade because there are so many reasons. This short essay will demonstrate some points regarding my point of view in the following paragraph:
First of all, in my opinion, it is widely understood that the rapid development of the life today makes it very important to learn the children to be dependent person during his early life stage. If the child get money for his hard work, he will be more responsible person. Eventually, that has great impact on his life in the future because he learns how to earn and save his money. However, if the child does not learn how to get money early, he will face many obstacles in the future
Another point why I advocate the idea of giving the children a reward for the high grades that they get in the school because such money will motivate them to study hard. The success in the school is the desire that each parent wish for their children. So, the money will motivate the children to mange their time and resources in order to reach their goals.
Finally, it is well-established fact that the child will feel more convenience if he earns money for his hard work. So, that will build the child character and stimulate him to think in creative way in order to get money that he need to buy whatever he want instead of depending on his parents. Moreover, that will be very useful for the parent because that makes the children understand how it is hard to obtain everything. So, they will try to help their parents
From what has been discussed above, we may draw a conclusion which says that, people who hold opposite idea may have the right to believe in that, but my opinion and other people opinions are overwhelmingly too much to be ignored.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 254, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...t money that he need to buy whatever he want instead of depending on his parents. Mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49363867684 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28913749486 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47582697201 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.0320265746 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.142857143 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0714285714 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312229534401 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124947987458 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118974464376 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175721392576 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136216661542 0.0645574589148 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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