Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The high grade is one of the crucial factors that define the high school students. About many decades, people concerned about the money prize for the high-grade of the children is right or wrong. From my point of view, it makes thing even worse than the normal and I believe it is better to not award children with a money depends on their grade.
To begin with, the money prize will give a wrong mentality and imitation for the children. They will weave money from their parents, as a result of everything they do such as chores. Moreover, if this situation lasts long, the child never do anything without money prize that breaks the child's behavior and the respect of their parents. Instead of spending a time with them, give a money as a prize seems the parents pay no attention to them that is the considerably harmful imitation. For example, one of my classmates makes a contradiction with her parents that value everything as a money such as if she washes the dishes, her parents should give her two dollars. She also said that after made a contradiction, she feels no respect for their parents.
Furthermore, the money will damage the relationship between parents and children. I think if the parents keep giving money to their child as an award, their relationship will become like a worker and employee. In addition, the children do things as a favor of money, not because of their dream and passion that has a crucial influence on their future. Also, because children have no interest in homework, they would spend their money and time on trivial things, which drives them into the wrong path of life. I think giving a money to their children is not a creative and beneficial solution of expressing their love and support. For example, I watched a video about a girl who lives like a millionaire even though she has no money and has no work. Because her parents divorced, she waives money from them saying that showing a love for her is to pay for expensive presents. Also, her parents did not struggle with it at first, but now she requires a thousand dollar a day that is a lot for a teenager girl. This is the result of a money award.
All in all, we never receive anything like the love of our parents during our lifetime. The cons of giving money to a child as a prize outweigh the pros of it and affect everyone who surrounded the children and most importantly it affects their future a lot.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
...it is better to not award children with a money depends on their grade. To begin wit...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
...tead of spending a time with them, give a money as a prize seems the parents pay no att...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
... the wrong path of life. I think giving a money to their children is not a creative and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, for example, i think, in addition, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58198614319 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47433691672 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461893764434 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2787117112 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.65 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234372854628 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861261036579 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385723427196 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147460553795 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556238764967 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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