Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that parents and education system have performed various methods to positively encourage students for promotion on their education. Some individuals point out that one efficient method of encouragement is offering students money for each promotion on their education, while other claims that offering money is inappropriate solution in the education system. It seems to me that this method is completely wrong for a couple of reasons described in the following.
To begin with, this method is inappropriate because they learn to do each task just for achieving money and this method can have negative effect on students' personality growth. In fact, a kind of materialistic living would be prevailed among them. As a result, when student become mature based on their previous experience do their tasks just for achieving profits. For example, they would not nether doing charity work, nor helping poor people. The statistics in Iran show that children who have been growth at the rich families and their families learn them a king of materialistic living and provided everything for them, have little attention to charity work.
Secondly, all the families are not affordable to give their student money for each promotion on their academic achievement. Therefore, at the class this method can pose dire effect on middle-class students and their efficiency might increase.
Admittedly, students need to encourage efficiently for getting a high score. Since these encouragements can result in a kind of inspiration for them and after that students put lot of effort for achieving their academic goals. Nevertheless, there are appropriate kinds of encouragement for students such as offering them a trip or inexpensive gifts.
To conclude, for aforementioned reasons I strongly believe that providing students with money for each high grade is not only inefficient, but also can pose negative effects on them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in fact, kind of, no doubt, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3696369637 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9392436143 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554455445545 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7192041947 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.214285714 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6428571429 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3571428571 5.45110844103 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218722998433 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888578855045 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436811136626 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13495871989 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243218829508 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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