Some parent offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Being successful has great importance in everyone's life. For this purpose, some parents decide to offer money to their children for their high grades in school. Personally, I believe that it can be beneficial for children. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, parents will encourage their children to do their best by giving them some money after receiving high marks for their exams. To explain more, receiving this money, even if it is not very much, can be seen as a prize for the children and they will believe that they did their best in their studying, so this can increase their self-confidence and they will give all their attempts for the next exam. As a result, their success will be more probable. On the other hand, this thought of prize and self-confidence can make them ready to deal with future challenges and believe in themselves for prosperity. My brother's experience is a compelling example of this. When he went to school, my parents gave him some money after his high scores, so he always seems to be a hero and studied more for his next exams and this behavior started to be intrinsic in him to try more and receive more. If my parents had not given him the money as a prize, he would not have done his best for the school.
Secondly, receiving money from an early age and managing it by the parents, children learn how to handle their money. To be more specific, while at an early age, children receive little money they can learn when, where, and how to spend their money. In other words, they can understand what is worthy enough to spend money for and any financial mistake in that age is compensable. Therefore, this can prevent wasting the money and they learn how to have a financial program from an early age. As a result, they can achieve prosperity in the future. For instance, in my last example, my brother first started to save money because he was persistent to buy a toy car, on the other hand, he liked a bicycle. Regardless of our advice for his physical health and buying the bicycle, he decided to buy the toy car but after some months the toy car broke and he was very upset about that, then he understood that it was better for him to buy the bicycle.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... was better for him to buy the bicycle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, as a result, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50121654501 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4047177875 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474452554745 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5185636986 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.777777778 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294522868929 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110466588082 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999817724707 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228924492465 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575966549015 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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