Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

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Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

In technological world owning a smart phone is became necessary, but by whom it should be own that also does matter. In other worlds, although smart phone has valuable merits still children should not own the smart phone. According to me it is parent’s obligation to stop their children from owning a smart phone. I will explain in detail in my ensuing paragraphs.
Cell phones have the power to distract young students from schoolwork. Rather than paying attention in class, students try to sneak opportunities to play on their phones. Instead of thinking about schoolwork, they obsessively text each other and try to check sites like Facebook. This takes time away from valuable studying. This is a problem both during school and afterwards, when youngsters should be working on their homework.
At the same time, smart phones can be extremely costly. Many plans require parents to pay abusively high monthly rates. At times, these rates can climb even higher if children use too much data due to things like downloading songs on the Internet. Rather than wasting money on a phone, parents should use the funds on better causes, like tutors for their children, or a home computer on which supervised learning can take place.
Finally, smart phones can be dangerous for young children. We are still unsure that medically what are the long term effects of exposure to cell phones are, particularly on vulnerable groups such as children. It would be better to be safe than sorry. The less exposure children have to potential toxins, the better. At the same time, kids are sometimes targeted on social media sites by dangerous strangers. If parents allow young children to have smart phones, it might be difficult to protect them in the long term from these kinds of threats.
Let’s put in a nutshell, while older children may sometimes need them to stay in touch with their parents, when they are outside of the house after school, in case they do not require phone with internet access. In my consideration parents can guide their children in right direction by not allowing them smart phones.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...nological world owning a smart phone is became necessary, but by whom it should be own...
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Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...hildren should not own the smart phone. According to me it is parent's obligation to stop ...
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Line 3, column 184, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...n climb even higher if children use too much data due to things like downloading son...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, still, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97733711048 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55316398332 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580736543909 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.3471156522 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6666666667 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8095238095 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.57142857143 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332775430203 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954604732016 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787104895614 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182680297542 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537433548342 0.0645574589148 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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