Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
With the advancement in the technology, some of the devices have become inevitable part of our lives and smartphones, are one of them. But I agree with parents who forbid their kids from owning a smartphone. I have two compelling reasons to support this claim, which I will elaborate upon in my further essay.
To start with, I want to focus on the well-known and widely experienced result from the usage of smartphones - wastage of time and lack of physical activity. There have been various studies an experiments with have showcased the above-mentioned effect from the usage of smartphones. I have a very convinving example which is from my own life's experience. Few years back, when the hype of smartphone started, my parents gifted me a smartphone- which ultimetely turned into a curse for me rather than boon. I started using the smartphones and it's various attractive features, almost all the time. Due to this, my studies suffered and my grades detoriated. Since my physical activities also started diminishing, I lost the badmintion matches, which used to be one of my forte. Soon, my parents realised that smartphones is not good for me and they asked me to limit my time for using smartphone.
Secondly, another reason which is more scientific and proved by various researchers all over the world- the radiations from smartphones weakeness the cells of the brain, and especially, children. As an adolosent, a child's brain has more capability to learn quickly than adults. This learning ability is hindered when a child is exposed more to the radiations from the smartphones which weakeness the brain cells. For instance, their have been studies which showcase difference between two child- initally who had same IQ levels. But one was allowed to use smartphones and other was not allowed. After studying them for months, their were evident results which showed that the kid who was not allowed to use the smartphone was able to learn and understand things better than his peer, who had access to the smartphone.
At the end, I would like to conclude with the notion that, there might be instances when smartphones have proved their worth like for example with the use of GPS in smartphones, you can easily locate your kid even if he gets lost in the crowd. But one should always weigh the various pros and cons of smartphones before coming to the conclusion. Thus, I strongly feel that parents should forbid their kids from using smartphones till certain age atleast.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...With the advancement in the technology, some of the devices have become inevitable part of ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an experiment' or simply 'experiments'?
Suggestion: an experiment; experiments
...tivity. There have been various studies an experiments with have showcased the above-mentioned...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'child' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'children'.
Suggestion: children
...s which showcase difference between two child- initally who had same IQ levels. But o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94976076555 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74994193876 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540669856459 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2804220761 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.45 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142309445947 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483756234794 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385037513403 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935815159868 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0168883035124 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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