A teacher’s ability to relate well with students is more important than excellent knowledge of the subject being taught.
The lecture explained why the computerized voting system can not replace the traditional voting system. There are the following three reasons.
First of all, not everyoen one can use computers correctly. Some people do not have access to computers, some people are not used of computers, and some people are even scared of this new technology. If the voters do not know how to use a computer, how do you expect them to finish the voting process through computers? This directly refutes the
reading passage which states that computerized voting is easier by just touching the screen.
Secondly, computers may make mistakes as the people do. As computers are programmed by the human beings, thus erros are inevitable in the computer system. Problems caused by computer voting systems may be more serious than those caused by people. A larger number of votes might be miss counted or even removed from thesystem. Furthermore, it would take more energy to recount the votes. Again this
contradicts what is stated in the reading which stated that only people will make mistakes
in counting.
Thirdly, computerized voting system is not reliable because it has not reached a stable status. People trust computers to conduct banking transactions because the computerized banking system is being used daily and frecuently and has been stable. How ever, the voting does not happen as often as banking thus the computerized voting system has not
been proved to be totally reliable.
All in all, not everyone can use a computer properly, computer cause mistakes and computerized voting system is not reliable are the main reasons why computerized voting system can not replace the traditional voting system.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 43.0788530466 23% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 52.1666666667 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 276.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26086956522 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65484541147 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510869565217 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.0106521197 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.75 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3125 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.53405017921 176% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0365164448215 0.236089414692 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0168121744456 0.076458572812 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301183808835 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0203385178546 0.150856017488 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312484856314 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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