Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
With the advancement in technology, some of the devices have become an inevitable part of our lives and smartphones, are one of them. But I agree with parents who forbid their kids from owning a smartphone. I have two compelling reasons to support this claim, which I will elaborate upon in my further essay.
To start with, I want to focus on the well-known and widely experienced result from the usage of smartphones - wastage of time and lack of physical activity. There have been various studies an experiments with have showcased the above-mentioned effect from the usage of smartphones. I have a very convincing example which is from my own life's experience. A few years back, when the hype of smartphone started, my parents gifted me a smartphone- which ultimately turned into a curse for me rather than a boon. I started using the smartphones and it's various attractive features, almost all the time. Due to this, my studies suffered and my grades deteriorated. Since my physical activities also started diminishing, I lost the badminton matches, which used to be one of my fortes. Soon, my parents realized that smartphones are not good for me and they asked me to limit my time for using a smartphone.
Secondly, another reason which is more scientific and proved by various researchers all over the world- the radiations from smartphones weakness the cells of the brain, and especially, children. As an adolescent, a child's brain has more capability to learn quickly than adults. This learning ability is hindered when a child is exposed more to the radiations from the smartphones which weakness the brain cells. For instance, there have been studies which showcase the difference between two child- initially who had the same IQ levels. But one was allowed to use smartphones and other was not allowed. After studying them for months, there were evident results which showed that the kid who was not allowed to use the smartphone was able to learn and understand things better than his peer, who had access to the smartphone.
In the end, I would like to conclude with the notion that, there might be instances when smartphones have proved their worth like for example with the use of GPS in smartphones, you can easily locate your kid even if he gets lost in the crowd. But one should always weigh the various pros and cons of smartphones before coming to the conclusion. Thus, I strongly feel that parents should forbid their kids from using smartphones until a certain age at least.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 37, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
With the advancement in technology, some of the devices have become an inevitable part ...
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Line 3, column 191, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an experiment' or simply 'experiments'?
Suggestion: an experiment; experiments
...tivity. There have been various studies an experiments with have showcased the above-mentioned...
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Line 5, column 493, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'child' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'children'.
Suggestion: children
...ich showcase the difference between two child- initially who had the same IQ levels. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, at least, for example, for instance, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2082.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89882352941 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76698735165 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531764705882 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0261154896 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.1 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143207455679 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483180546003 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038453317218 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934527990871 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0162359032767 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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