Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Nobody doubts that we live in the world with rapidly growing technology. It is commonly that we need things to meet our demands. The issue about owning smart phones in children has often been discussed, especially in the technological ages. Many parents may allow thier children to use them, whereas some parents may disagree, and insist that children should not allowed to use smartphones. However, from my point of view, I strongly believe that smartphones are important tools and they should be permited in children. This essay will explore two majors reason, that why I feel this way.
In the first place, smartphones can make life easier. They are convenient tools to contact with parents, friends and teachers. Parents can follow their kids easily than contact with teachers or children friends. Sometimes these persons are not avaliable to answer the call or reply the messsage. For example, my newphew who are ten years old, when his school finishes, he likes to call to my aunt to report her that where he is waiting for picking up. For this reason, kids should own the smartphones to keep in touch with their parents and they are good for them not to bother other people.
Secondly, apart being practical, smartphones can release parents's tasks. It can help kids do homework by themselves. When childrens do not understand the questions or lessons from schools. They can ask their classmates to help them discuss about assignments. Moreover, sometimes parents cannot answer the accurate answers, children can surf their doubts via internet with various interesting sources and enjoy learning through the multimedias. Hence, these tools can assit childrens' works and children also enjoy using them.
Taking these points into consideration, I am of the opinion that children should allow to own smartphones. This is because, they are beneficial both ease to contact parents and supporting them from schools' works.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'allow'
Suggestion: allow
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Message: Did you mean 'using'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: using
...insist that children should not allowed to use smartphones. However, from my point of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, whereas, for example, i feel, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18849840256 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5776313476 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594249201278 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4599452749 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.65 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266841833874 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714539664128 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629368181466 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153197438765 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441964143365 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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