Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

Considering to students' achivements has an undeniable effect on their future life. Some people claim that financial prize for each good grade is proper, but I do not think so. In my view, there are other important factor, which should be attentioned for encoraging little persons. I feel this way for 3 main reasons, that I will explore in the following essay.

Regarding the issue of devotin prize for each of students' grades, one might suggest that it's impact will vanish during the time. To clarify, when I was an elementary school student, my father gave me a 1$ for first 20 in mathematic exam. I was glad and tryed more for the next time. By repeating this manner, notonly did I gradually lost my motivation, but I also did not do my best in that course.

Another aspect of giving money to students for encoraging them after each nice mark is not being aware of their needs. For example, last week, when my sister won a sports competent in international level, she expected earn a golden medal or something like that, but her teacher only provided her with some money. If her tutor had selected another prize, she would not have enleash her field now.

Most importantly, having considered that student in school time are not mature enough for thinking about correct use of money, each wisdome individual assert that it is not a good idea providing money for that age children. For instance, last year, when I gave 100$ to my 12 years-old girl, he spent all of them on lottery!

In all, what drives somebody to think that money is not good prize for children's high grad is above reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 283.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69964664311 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44155548219 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.65371024735 0.524837075471 125% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7512864758 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.307692308 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301736509242 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969880909329 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864751494207 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168385452683 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522419274721 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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