Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
parents should give school -age children money as a prize for getting high grade at school. Personally, I am of the opinion that children should not receive money just for their academic performance. I feel this way because of two reasons, which I will explore in this essay.
First of all, it is not necessary to offer children money for high marks they get. Parents have provided funds for their children’s education, including tuition fee, textbook and other devices required. Therefore, children should take their responsibility as a student which is to do their best at school, while offering money for high grade encourages children to cheat to get high scores. This is best demonstrated by a research conducted by Peking university, results of which shows that compared to children not receiving prize, those who get money are two to three times likely to cheat in their exams. As we can see, it is better not to offer children money for high grades.
Secondly, receiving prize for academic performance also encourages children draw the wrong conclusion that they should get paid for any achievement they have mode in their life. As a member in the society, everyone should feel obliged to take certain responsibilities without being paid. For example, according to the study mentioned above, the percentage of children who among those offered money is much higher than the other group.
In conclusion, I am fully convinced that children should not get money from parents for academic performance. This is because there is no need to pay children money and because it encourages children to form the wrong value.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Parents
parents should give school -age children money ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1362.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 269.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06319702602 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69717397415 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524163568773 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4380467485 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.769230769 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360741363684 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154812152084 0.076458572812 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104645333238 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240448230467 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0902418257045 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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