Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
The education policy regarding the school-age childen can be vary in different families. I believe that there does not exisit a best policy, whereas I do not consider give children more money for good grade makes positive effect to them. In the following essay, I will explain why I stand this point of view.
To begin with, Obtaining good grades does not aim to honer the parents, but aims to evaluate the study performance of children. Consequently, they should take responsibility for themselves, not for the money instead. If they do it for the money, they will not be able to improve themselves without the benifits. Take my cousin for example, she always got extra money druing the high school. However, since she left home after entering the university, no one would give her extra mony, and her grade dropped drasticly.
Furthermore, I do not regard the grade as the most important thing for school-age children. There are still numerous crtical things, such as morality , good emotion, or friendly personality. As a result, if I hold the intention to offer my child more money on him or her fabulous behavior, high grades will not be one of my standard, in oder to avoid he or she bceome too arrogent . For example, when I was young, my mom never gave me extra money even if I got the first place on the exam. I really appriciated her now because she taught me the grades is not the most important thing. As a result, I can be a much more humble person, at least in my pointview.
Finally, I actually doubt that giving more money for high grade can truly raise their grade. Imagine if you got more money occasionally because of high grade, I would preserve it as accidiental revenue. In the meanwhile, if I had the ability to get the good grade constantly, it meant I do not need that money to encourage me study. As a result, I hold the belief there will be a better way to improve children's academic behavior.
Given the reasons above, I firmly believe that provide the children more money for each high grade is not a good idea. It is not to say that the parents reward children on this way is totally unreasonable. However, I believe I have substatiated my point of view.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...s. I believe that there does not exisit a best policy, whereas I do not consider ...
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Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...umerous crtical things, such as morality , good emotion, or friendly personality. ...
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Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...r to avoid he or she bceome too arrogent . For example, when I was young, my mom n...
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Line 5, column 493, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
...if I got the first place on the exam. I really appriciated her now because she taught me the grade...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, really, regarding, so, still, whereas, while, at least, for example, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6189258312 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62367496801 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519181585678 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.1225419388 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.0 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.619047619 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384167164885 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108635412472 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08049436032 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219440177555 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298139038677 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...s. I believe that there does not exisit a best policy, whereas I do not consider ...
^
Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...umerous crtical things, such as morality , good emotion, or friendly personality. ...
^^
Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...r to avoid he or she bceome too arrogent . For example, when I was young, my mom n...
^^
Line 5, column 493, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
...if I got the first place on the exam. I really appriciated her now because she taught me the grade...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, really, regarding, so, still, whereas, while, at least, for example, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6189258312 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62367496801 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519181585678 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.1225419388 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.0 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.619047619 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384167164885 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108635412472 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08049436032 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219440177555 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298139038677 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.