Some parents offer their school-age children money for every good grade
There is no doubt that the way of training children by their parents is a crutial factor in their future life. The ever-increasing prominence of education of children in a standard way has engendered this question as to whether it is better for parents to give their children a money for every good grade or not. Some people believe that giving money to children for a desirable grade could make them greedy and they disagree with this idea, while I am of the opinion that it is more rational to give children money for their good grades. There are several grounds, two of which I will explore in what follows.
The first reason coming to mind is that giving award can be a great motivation for school-age children. In the way of illustration, when they know that if they do their job very well, they could get money, they would try very hard and study more dilactely to get a good score. This motivation, would help them to be a hard worker student, and as a result, they would prosper in school with more chance. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in primary school, I was not a good student and I always did my homeworks half-heartedly. Accordingly, my parents told me if I Took a high score in each course, they would give me 10 dollares. After that day, I began to study more accurately and did my homeworks completely. Because, in this way I could get 10 dollars from my parents which was very exciting for me on that age. Had my parents not designated money for each high score, I would have not tryed that much.
The second noteworthy reason which deserves some words here is that when they earn money this their efforts, they know the value of money. In the other words, if parents regularly give their children a designated money for their requirement, they never know the value of money. On the contrast, children who get money as a result of their endevoar, would me more acounting individuals in the future. For instance, I always got money from my parents just when I had a high score, while my brother always was gotting a determind amount of money from our parents. As a result, now I always work very diligently because I know that this is the only way to earn money. Conversely, my brother is still dependent to my parents.
On the whole, based on the p
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a standard way" with adverb for "standard"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ing prominence of education of children in a standard way has engendered this question as to whet...
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...andard way has engendered this question as to whether it is better for parents to give their ...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
...tter for parents to give their children a money for every good grade or not. Some peopl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, conversely, first, if, second, so, still, well, while, as to, for instance, no doubt, as a result, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4880952381 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53665196166 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447619047619 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8556161803 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.25 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379743476917 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114184237735 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111795954029 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216791037519 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.15841960464 0.0645574589148 245% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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