Some parents offer their school-aged children money for each high grade they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
There's no doubt how important it is to be rewarded. No one can neglect the fact that encouragements are of enterprise factors in every success. However, as any other issue, the matter of "limit" appears to be the key point. Not all the means of encouragements are followed by pure benefits; as acclaiming by money which is known to be a renowned reward. There are numerous drawback aspects of being praised financially, the worst is when it surpasses higher goals as education. This leads to totally adverse/inclement consequences especially in sensitive school-age children whose psychological maturity has not occurred yet.
First and most is the changes occur in the impetus. For instance, once a student is obsessed with marks merely because of the reward, the excellent aim of learning will be forgotten. On the other hand, it might be followed by unfair means of winning as cheating which not only is not the presentative of their diligence, but also impacts their morals in a negative manner.
Furthermore, it's not only the child who's been hurt: their parents might be victims of their own method of training. Not always the financial situation of family is well enough to reward financially; thus, in the eyes of a young children, he or she has not been praised as much as he or she deserved. This will induce depression or discouragement in both parties inadvertently.
Last but not least is the expectation of children. It's undebatable that there should be a balance between the prize and the achievement. While a first-year-school student is content with a bar of chocolate, the olders will expect more. The older they get, the greater deal of money they claim; it will turn into a non-affordable amount eventually.
To the conclusion, giving money is not the best option. The praised aim of education might be jeopardized by young children, the expectations might arise dramatically and the parents might not be able to afford constantly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, so, thus, well, while, for instance, no doubt, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05230769231 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17046428571 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578461538462 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9803644516 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2222222222 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0555555556 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147650226183 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040572770239 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418475429878 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0773413147609 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248655191738 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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