Some people believe that students should be given one long vacation each year Others believe that students should have several short vacations throughout the year Which view do you agree with Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer Be sur

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Some people believe that students should be given one long vacation each year. Others believe that students should have several short vacations throughout the year. Which view do you agree with?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.

As time passes, students are put in a much more harsh environment such as having to compete with other students for a job opportunity or studying for a excessive amount of time to achieve high scores. They need a time off from their life and go on a vacation to refresh their tired souls. While some people might claim that the vacation period being longer the better, even though its a one time chance, I believe that quantity is better than quality when it comes to vacations. The reasons to why I believe in such way will be elaborated in more detail below.
First of all, going on a long vacation would be harder for students to restore their usual life. People usually do not require long days of rest to restore their normal state, and longer the days pass from their usual life, the lazier they would get, causing them to take longer days to adapt to their normal life after their vacation ends. As an example, when I was in my first year in my university, I decided to go full on with studying for a whole semester and would rest for my whole summer vacation. However, after the vacation ended, going back to my usual routine was too tiring for me because my body was already adapted to the laziness I had achieved during the vacation. Due to this, it took me a long time to regain my usual state.
Furthermore, thinking that they having only one opportunity in going on a vacation would give them excessive pressure and stress, because they do not want to waste their time. Even though vacation was given to students with a purpose of letting them take their time to rest, students would become desperate in elliciting the best entertainment out of the provided vacation days. They would cram their vacation schedule with all the things that they had desired to do and if they fail to do so, it would cause them depression. This definitely would not serve the purpose of resting and restoring their mental and physical state.
To sum up, going on a vacation for longer periods of time would make it difficult for students to regain their usual lifestyle. Also, students would become desperate in trying to make the best out of their only chance of going on a vacation, causing excessive stress and pressure. Due to such reasons, I believe that providing several short vacations throughout the year is much better for students.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, so, while, as to, such as, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60911270983 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36405354097 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462829736211 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.9565045189 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.125 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0625 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20484932243 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830742309806 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584343562681 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143683888163 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382778895134 0.0645574589148 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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