some people believe that when busy parents do not have enough time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to school work.
The relationship between parents and children has a significant impact on children's future. In this hectic world, most parents are too busy, so they do not have enough time to dedicate to their children, and it can be harmful to their kids. As a result, it becomes important for parents how they have to spent their limited time with their children to reach beneficial achievements. Some people believe that parents should allocate their free time with their children on the children's education and improve their school tasks. But I think playing and doing some physical activity with children will have more advantages.
First, physical activities are reduced these days because of technological advancement. Children prefer to spend a great deal of their time in front of their computers without any physical activity. This issue not only has terrible effects on their physical health but also puts their mental health in danger. In this way, parents have to pay more attention to the time they dedicate to their children and encourage their youngsters to play games and exercise together to enhance their health.
Second, the best way to teach children valuable tips and moral behavior are to show them the advantages of these lessons practically. Playing games is one of the best practices to help parents convey their training tips to their kids. While playing games or sports, children can make mistakes and either choose their way independently, and they have to overcome many obstacles. At the end of the game, they will know the consequences of their decisions and learn what they have to do to succeed in real life. For instance, when my brother was a child, my father allocates his little leisure time to play games with him. During the games, my father let my brother make a lot of mistakes and become fail. But after finishing the play, my father said you have to try again until reaching success and never giving up. Now, my brother is a young man, and he is a prominent businessman. He always says he obtain his wishes because he never stops to endeavor. He learned it during his childhood games with my father.
In conclusion, these days, it becomes vital that parents how to spend their little time with children. Playing games and exercising can be the best way because it positively influences physical and mental health. Also, it becomes plausible for parents to convert their values and experiences to their children effectively.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 899, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'obtains'.
Suggestion: obtains
...rominent businessman. He always says he obtain his wishes because he never stops to en...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95631067961 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55360108462 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504854368932 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.6006477481 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8181818182 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7272727273 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361255655932 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113661747164 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083936630398 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239551663107 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771473703561 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.