Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Throughout history, parents have been always concerned about how to raise their children very well. There is a controversy discussion that how parents should spend their free time with their children when their schedule is very busy and whether this time should be spent to having fun playing games and sports or children's coursework. In my opinion, it is essential for parents to have a fun time with their children. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint my reasons to support my opinion.
The first point coming to my mind is that parents are their children's learning models. Their attitude about different things can inspire them. Hence, parents need to show the importance of playing games and sports to their children. In other words, the more parents emphasize exercising, the more children take care about it . My own experience is a good demonstration of this point. When I was a student, the most focus of my parents was on the coursework. In fact, it was so important for them that I got a great score in the exams. Hence, every time I was under the pressure of a heavy curriculum, I would often skip the exercise to save my time, while if I had learned to exercise under any circumstances, it would have help me to reduce my stress and perhaps I could have been more successful.
Another important point which deserves some words here is that playing game sets a stage for conversation between children and parents and therefore it helps the whole family to foster closeness in family. In fact a close-nit family is not just born; it is nurtured and encouraged. It sometimes might be difficult to say some problems for children to their parents at a normal situation but playing games can provide a good opportunity for the whole family to feel more free and intimate in expressing their problems.
Finally, in addition to what was mentioned above, according to some recent studies, the children who spend more time to playing games with the family members are able to make more friends as they have learned to obey the rules of the games and listen to and respect the opinions of other members. Besides, they also learn teamwork and to cooperate.
From what has been disscussed above, playing game in family environment have many benefits for the whole family and helps to increase the quality of life for each family members.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: have always been
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, hence, if, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, in fact, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83950617284 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57700921336 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498765432099 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.0526469364 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.888888889 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284349364315 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927330840065 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0941625960025 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161489050688 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088367406974 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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