Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern life, both father and mother go to work and consequently they can not spend much time with their children. Personally, I believe that parents should assign some time to play with their children instead of just being concerned a bout their education. In the following essay I try to explain my supportive reasons for this.
First of all, the majority of children most likely want the constant attention from their parent, and they really enjoy when we play with them. In addition, independent research has shown that playing is crucial for the development of children's brains. Moreover, when we as parents play with our kids, they will feel that they are important for us and it has a positive impact on their mental health. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I have a one-year- old child and when I play with him, no matter what is his mood, he begins to laugh.
As a second reason, I think that if we just pay attention to our children when they are doing their schoolwork, they start to believe that they, themselves, are not important for us. In other words, they think that what is really important for us is their educational issues. As a result, they will resent going to school and it has negative effect on their future. On the other hand, children spend most of their day time in school and thus they really need some free time to speak with their parents about some of their other concerns. It evident that lack of parental love and support in childhood lead to having many problems in teenagerhood.
To conclude, I hold the opinion that parents should spend time with their children with playing and doing something fun. This is because their children acquire more self esteem and it rises their happiness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, moreover, really, second, so, thus, i think, in addition, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79220779221 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65264310314 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525974025974 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0899649529 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.538461538 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.45110844103 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310051478154 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117739686448 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928048734481 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219272589079 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432088386403 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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