Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, life is getting more and more difficult compared to the past era so people spend most of their time out of the house to manage and handle the expenditure of their lives. The most vulnerable persons are their children because they have to pass most of the time far from the parents. Hence, there are two options for how they can spend their free time. Whether they should enjoy their leisure time with their children or help them in their assignments. I firmly believe to have fun or playing is much better than the second way. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on points of view cogently.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that it affects their mood, so they will feel more excitement rather boring because the type of fun with family is greatly various than something they have with their friend. To take a personal experience as an example, when I was a child, I desired to be the weekend that I could go to the zoo with my parents and enjoy feeding animals.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating this issue is that children understand the meaning of family. Family is not just to belong to the parents and place, it means feel emotionally relaxed and you have the supportive persons that you can enjoy life without any troubles. According to the study conducted at MIT university, although parents provide all financial materials for their children, they do not feel comfortable to live with their parents. Since they did not make any connection with them.
Finally, it is an indisputable fact that teachers or tutors can help children in their homework if the parents are busy and also tutors present more efficient help rather than parents. However, no one can fill the empty place of the family. Even though children may do not complain to their parents that they do not have any vacation, their sense of hollow is not deniable.
In brief, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that accompanying children create memorable events in their minds that will not never be forgotten. Besides, when they grew older they appreciate their parents for making this valuable memory.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85326086957 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52275648285 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535326086957 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0746112756 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.058823529 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47058823529 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260551545188 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852772768239 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605067917812 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140469637919 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686784038329 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22 Out of 30
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