Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is an argument among people on how to spent your lesuire time with your kids, if you have a hectic life. Some belive that you should use this time to have fun and play games or sport. Others think that you should spend it on doing school projects together. In my opinion, the best way to utilize this time to have interesting and joyful activities with your children. Because these types of activity make you closer together and prepare them for real life. I will explain my reasons in datail hereunder.
First, doing fun deeds which bring laugh and smile on your and your kids faces build a special bond between you and you kids. Put differently, when you laugh with someone and enjoy spending time with him/her, it makes you closer to each other. Also, it destroy possible emotinal barriers that stop your kid to talk to you about different things happening in their lives. Eventually your children will trust you to ask your advise about crucial decision which they have to make. Or they come to you every time they have importatn problem which have to be solve wisely. Therefore, your loved ones communicate with you more effectivly.
Second, during a fun activity you can teach your kids valuable lessons about life. As you are busy most of the day, you will be able to use this time in order to teach them about main things in life. Instead of spending on solving a math problem, you can teach them how to be faithful, truthful and a team player. You can even design a game to teach them these values. For example, you can play soccer which is a group activity. If your kid cheated during the game, you can tell him/her that cheating is a unacceptable way to win a game. Hence, he/she will learn a lessone about real life in future.
To sum up, parrents how are busy all day long, have to spend their time effectivly with their children. Doing fun and joyful activities during this time will lead to more closness to your children. In addition, it will give you a chance to teach them your values and insights.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'you' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'kid'
Suggestion: kid
...uild a special bond between you and you kids. Put differently, when you laugh with s...
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Message: Did you mean 'destroys'?
Suggestion: destroys
...akes you closer to each other. Also, it destroy possible emotinal barriers that stop yo...
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Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
...our children will trust you to ask your advise about crucial decision which they have ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
..., you can tell him/her that cheating is a unacceptable way to win a game. Hence, ...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...he will learn a lessone about real life in future. To sum up, parrents how are busy all ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53551912568 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19373556709 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510928961749 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.7307555786 48.9658058833 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.4545454545 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6363636364 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40909090909 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248126081044 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891375813468 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.091708293446 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192754965273 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0896737058821 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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