Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them. Today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific details and examples to support your answer
There is an agrument among people on the youth deciding for their lives based on their parents ideas. Some think that todays young poeple are as depended on their parents as they have been in past years. On the contrary, other belive that nowadays children are more independent of their parrents views to make up their minds than before. In my opinion, kids are more relying on themselve to make decisions than the past. Because our today society values are accentuating more and more on individualism. Also, modern school structures are leading students to increase their independenc of their parents. I will explain my reasons in detail hereunder.
First, Our society is eventually taking steps towards individualism and liberty . Put differently, one of the modern values of a successful society is that every person has its own personality and lives the way he/she wants. Human modern community appreciates diversity and independence. On the contrary, 500 years ago people were still be living in extended families and parents used to make all the dicisions for their childerns. Also, society did not value a child who wanted to live independed of his/her family and blamed him/her for being rude or disespectful to his/her parrents. By passing from concensional to modern era, viewes of children toward parents role in their decision changed. Today, children do not think of making independent decision as an impolite way of atitude.
Second, our modern school teaching methods prepare our students to be more and more independent. In other words, schools teach kids to make their minds by themselves. For example, in elementry school children will be teaching how to decide which food have to eat whitout asking their parents. Therfore, they will learn to choose healthy food even if their parents are not there to decide for them or guide them. Hence, children will rely on their own wisdom and knowledge to choose their ways.
To sum up, modern children are more independent of their parents to make decisions than past children. As todays cultural values are emphasize on individualism and also modern teaching ways prepare student to be more independent of others including their own parents to make decisions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: .
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'emphasized'.
Suggestion: emphasized
...children. As todays cultural values are emphasize on individualism and also modern teachi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, second, so, still, as to, for example, in my opinion, in other words, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1860.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12396694215 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65654084746 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528925619835 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2009703942 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5714285714 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2857142857 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306257622392 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100551012201 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703225287382 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2057835154 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548503812479 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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