Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Children always need parents in the growing and if the parents don't give some time they are devestated. Some people hold the opposite perspective. I personally, though, believe that parents should spend time with kids anspd ask about school stuff no matter how busy the schedule. In the following essay, I intend to put forth my points and reasons for support.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that in school children get bully and have a lot to tell about things going on in school. The parents who doesn't take care of it so sometimes consequences are worse. For example, one of my friend she is always busy in her business and doesn't have any time to spend with her daughter. One day she had to go out of town and left her daughter at my home. She was playing with son when I saw she looks so sad and I asked with love that what happens, she started crying. At that time, I realize their is something she wants to tell. As a results, she told about how badly she was bullied in school and tried a sucked which is scary. I told my friends please give some to her and now both are living happily.
Secondly, sports is a good activity for parents and kids but it's good if parents have a whole to spend with kids. The parents who are busy in work and having difficulty to maintain work life balance such parents need to give time on school related so kids can share things about school. For instance, I have a son and as a single mother my timings are really tight. After work I take my son to park for some activity if there is no school projects are due. One day I was teaching him how to do drawing and while doing drawing he started t to talk about his teacher and told me that he tries to touch him. I filed a report and when the background is checked he was fired. Therefore, this is how I helped my son by getting close to him otherwise kids never tell anything to parents if they are not friend,
In the light of the reasons mentioned about I advise to every parent must spend some time with kids.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.24675324675 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19587924231 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498701298701 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4342709193 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0526315789 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2631578947 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26591890189 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821498587906 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623622110523 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179231261138 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293834653585 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.37 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.39 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 86.8835125448 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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