Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with the children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
It seems, in many cases, very difficult for us to prefer one to another because both of them have their advantages and disadvantages to the extent that is hard to distinguish. Yet, that does not mean they are all same to me. Which one I prefer dependence on my own experience, lifestyle and emotional concerns. To be frank, I prefer that some parents, who are always busy, spend their time to do some activity about the homework of their children for two important reasons.
In the beginning, I would like to mention that parents not only can effect on their children but also can teach many great habits to them. One of the important treatments that children can learn of their busy parent is the management of time. For instance, when I studied at high school, the work hours of my mother was around 10 hours. Although this time was not enough for my mother who do some daily activity, she was able to divide her time to some parts; such as help me to do my homework. In fact, this issue helps me to learn how can manage my time during day. Hence, my assignments are done by helping my mother.
Second, it is undeniable that each family can help their kids for improving the condition of them at school. If some parents, who spend lots of their time in outside, devoted the part of their time to their children, they can see the progress of them. For instance, before my mother helped me to do my daily assignment, I had not capable to get great score in my courses. I remember that the score of my math course was too low; therefore, my father who was mathematical professor in university decides to teach me math; although he always stay at university too late. Finally, both of us were so pleasant because my score is improved.
For what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that parents, who spend some parts of their time for helping their children; nevertheless, they have not enough time during day, were able to learn many thing to their children. All in all, children can learn how manage their time and they improve their knowledge in some course by helping of their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 541, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'stays'.
Suggestion: stays
...es to teach me math; although he always stay at university too late. Finally, both o...
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Line 4, column 218, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'many things'.
Suggestion: many things
...ugh time during day, were able to learn many thing to their children. All in all, children...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, as to, for instance, in fact, such as, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53926701571 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43521918542 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494764397906 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9966062241 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4705882353 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35294117647 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169385392435 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635828928413 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681473364363 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121931005627 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310093002874 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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