Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny that parents play a crucial role in their kids' lives. In fact, they have the upper hand in shaping their personalities, future, and career. Some people think that busy parents should spend their available time with their kids in playing games or sports. However, I disagree with them. I think that busy parents shout spent any spare time with their kids in working on anything relating to schoolwork for two significant reasons which I will explore in this essay.
To begin with, when busy parents spend their available time with their children in doing or go over anything correlating to school, It would improve their learning skills which would have a great impact on their academic performance. In other words, the parents are responsible, as teachers unless more, about how well their kids do at school.my own experience is a compelling example for what I mean. I am a single mother for two kids. I work as a pharmacist in CVS pharmacy. Unfortunately, my work shift starts at 9 am and ends at 9 pm. I barely find enough time to cook, clean house, and take care of myself let alone studying with my kids. I noticed that my son, John, is so week in math as his grade were not promising. I decided from that moment to spend every available single moment with him working on his math skills. We started using online resources and go over his mistakes to make sure that he mastered them. He ended up passing with flying colors. As you can see, My son would not have achieved this progress, if I did not spend my spare time working on his school work.
Another salient reason corroborating my stance is that if busy guardians spend their time with their children, this would strengthen their relationship. Having communication and building a strong bond are vital for them emotionally and educationally. As I mentioned before, I am a very busy single mother. Last year, my daughter Carol was in eighth grade. She used to get a very high grade and she used to work delightedly but I noticed that he grade suffered and she was spending a lot of time alone. I tried to figure out the reason. Eventually, she told me that she feels depressed as she cannot find any person to talk to. I started our daily conversation while I was helping her to catch up what she missed at her classes. I killed two birds with one stone. I was able to improve our relationship through our communication while we were working on her school work. This experience taught me the importance of using my available time to help my children and to build a strong bond between us as well.
In essence, even though some people think that parents, whenever they have time, enjoy playing games or sports with their kids. I adamantly think that they should spend this time with their children working on any schoolwork or anything related to it a. it will help their kids to enhance their academic performance. As well as, It is a golden opportunity to enhance their relationship with their parents. I encourage all parents and guardians to give this idea a try as it is worthy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, well, while, i mean, i think, in fact, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 105.0 43.0788530466 244% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2522.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 546.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61904761905 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58034104546 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485347985348 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 28.0 9.59856630824 292% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.0458552903 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8125 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0625 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317309748943 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763993681715 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862846932891 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218684870585 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445508866935 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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