Some people prefer to focus on ambitious dreams while others think realistic goals are more important. Which do you prefer and why?
We are living in a world, which people are attempting to approach their goals. In this way, there is a question on which one of the ambitious dreams or realistic goals would be appropriate to choose. I personally believe that it is the ambitious dreams making humans life meaningful. That is due to, the ambitious dream is as a motivation for humans' activities that make them hopeful and high confidence. Also, it keeps our eyes towards the future and makes progress in human life. My reasons are elucidated in detail hereunder.
First of all, ambitious dreams as a great motivation lead people towards the future and give them hope and confidence. Put differently, routine activities make human's life monotonous. Consequently, disappointment is an inevitable issue in such a life. My personal experience is a good example of this. I remember when I was a teenager I always talked with my best friend about our future career. He wanted to be an employee and work in a company. While my dream was to be an entrepreneur and have my own business. When I talked to him, he always was telling me your dream is ridiculous and you have to think about an achievable goal. However, I never stopped thinking about my dream. Indeed, thinking to my dream was like a fuel to my engine for more attempting in order to approach my goal. Eventually, after about seven years, I have touched my dream. Now, I have my company while my friend is one of my employees. He always talks about his monotonous life and I think about our conversations in the past.
AS the second reason, we can't expect considerable progress in our personal life and also society unless we have ambitious dreams. In other words, societies' elites definitely had had ambitious dreams before they did a significant job. For instance, Edison's life illustrates this issue quite well. Think about a world without electricity. In such a world, computer, internet, television, mobile, airplane have no meaning. If Edison had made himself busy with ordinary activities he couldn't have invented electricity. Therefore, most facilities, which today affect humans' life in a good way, are the consequence of Edison's ambitious dreams.
To sum up, ambitious dreams are as a motivation for hopeful people who are trying to approach their goals. Additionally, progresses in this world owe to these ambitious dreams. These are my reasons for why I believe that ambitious dreams are more effective in human's life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, i think, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93236714976 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85429990283 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487922705314 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.2711553391 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.4137931034 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.275862069 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185547785254 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053237003933 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509730574625 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127646487082 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330765534856 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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