Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
TPO#11 Task#2
The information era is an appropriate phrase to describe the current decade. If you Ignore or miss progression along with information-based society, I’m sure it would have undesirable consequences to you. In the past decades, books, newspapers, and magazines used to acquire first-hand information, but now Many internet-based media help you to be updated just with one click. I strongly agree with the people who say the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information for the following reasons:
First of all, because of a wide-speared network of the internet, you can find a diversity of useful information about what is happening all over the world as fast as possible and prepare yourself against a probable consequence or act tactfully. Take a merchant vocation, for instance; you can check stock market fluctuation every time you like and trade much more successful against the state that you have no related information of your market. I have heard frequently from Keyvan Jafari Tehrani, a prominent merchant of steal market that” navigation knowledge of useful information is a primary key to success and this is the internet, bank of such helpful information.”. You would be able to find your commodity or product market concentration; as a result, you would be able to decide what should you do with a very lower risk.
Furthermore, Some people claim that Internet-obtained information may create a problem. However, I revise their claim as a different view. I believe that any possible problem origin is because of having no adequate knowledge to make the right decision. Take health care problems, for example, All of us at least one time have confronted with such an important issue and with a simple, fast search of related web pages we have learned what’s the suitable action. As another common problem, I should point out to vein rumors and information where someone/something is praised or in contrast, ruined. A few clicks help you check the validation of news.
If I want to be frank, the Modern era's people are supposed to distinguish right from false and do not rely on any information. So, I suggest validating information to consider correct precious actions and prevent possible problems. To sum up, I should mention there much valuable information on the internet information banks and depend on their usage circumstances they could that may hack you or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, at least, for example, for instance, in contrast, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19395465995 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12932935202 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591939546599 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.8001576378 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.875 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8125 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322503435455 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935914409614 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071145664499 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200661491982 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0748750759384 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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