Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, technology has affected individual’s life. Sometimes it has positive effects on people and Sometimes does not. One of the newest technology is internet. Some people say that internet provides People a lot of valuable information. while other argue access to much information creates problems. Both side of Arguments has reasons for their claims. However, I believe internet provide us perfect data about many Things
First and foremost, todays, people have easy access to internet by using modern devices such as mobile Phone, laptops, iPod and etc. so they can search about anything whenever they want. We can learn many Things from internet and sometimes they can be very helpful. Take myself as an example, for my master Degree, I wanted to invent a robot for the first time in my university and I had to collect many information About robots, but unfortunately there was no database in the university library. Therefore, the best way For me to gather knowledge about robots was accessing to internet. so I searched for books, articles on The internet, and also I watched numerous videos on YouTube. Hence, after 4 months later I built a robot, And I received two prizes from university. Thereby, people can learn about many knowledge on the Internet.
Second, individuals can be aware of what is happening around them so readily. Some online channel like BBC and VOA updates news hour by hour from all around the world. For instance, about two weeks ago, I was dealing bitcoin at midnight and I really need to check the price of selling and buying of it. l couldn’t Go out and buy a newspaper, because the stores were closed at that time. So I turned on my laptop and With just one click I checked the bitcoin price. Therefore, if there was no internet, I couldn’t be aware of Bitcoin price at that moment.
Although, internet gives us precious information, but sometimes but sometimes it has negative effects on human society specially on children. Some Internet programs contain contents that are not suitable for children. As an example, news that contains Violent scenes have awful influences on youth, and when they get older, they may become an angry Person. But in general I believe there is many great information on the internet.
All in all, I think internet provides people with a lot of valuable information because they can learn many Things easily and also they are able to be aware of what is happening around them. I suggest governments To expand the internet to all cities and villages in my country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...s People a lot of valuable information. while other argue access to much information ...
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Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “while” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s People a lot of valuable information. while other argue access to much information ...
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Line 2, column 125, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ces such as mobile Phone, laptops, iPod and etc. so they can search about anything whene...
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Line 2, column 400, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...e in my university and I had to collect many information About robots, but unfortuna...
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Line 2, column 400, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...e in my university and I had to collect many information About robots, but unfortunately there w...
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Line 2, column 589, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...about robots was accessing to internet. so I searched for books, articles on The i...
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Line 2, column 807, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...ersity. Thereby, people can learn about many knowledge on the Internet. Second, in...
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Line 2, column 807, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun knowledge seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much knowledge', 'a good deal of knowledge'.
Suggestion: much knowledge; a good deal of knowledge
...ersity. Thereby, people can learn about many knowledge on the Internet. Second, individuals ...
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Line 4, column 51, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'but sometimes'.
Suggestion: but sometimes
...internet gives us precious information, but sometimes but sometimes it has negative effects on human societ...
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Line 4, column 391, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much great information', 'a good deal of great information'.
Suggestion: much great information; a good deal of great information
...rson. But in general I believe there is many great information on the internet. All in all, I think i...
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Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... all cities and villages in my country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92343387471 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70288578995 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533642691415 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.0774258394 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6153846154 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5769230769 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73076923077 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216587585389 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650268663487 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954030348715 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136642361064 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102651801547 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.