Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Nowadays, modern vehicles offer individuals an easy life. With the help of fast transportation like airplanes and trains, people can travel between cities and countries within a short time. some individuals think that people benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. While others disagree. Both sides of the arguments have considerable reasons for their claims, however, I do believe the former claim is true for two important reasons.
First and foremost, people by traveling in their own country can have many positive effects on the economy of their country. individuals by spending money in their country, not only does it improve the economy of the country but also it decreases people’s poverty. For instance, my father works in a restaurant, he is a chef. On normal days he just works ten hours, but on special days like new year holiday, he has to work twenty-four hours. Thereby he is able to make more money. however, my father has to stay at the restaurant for more hours, but it has good influences on my family and it improves the family’s economy. Furthermore, tourists who travel to my country, sometimes they buy special things such as souvenirs, which can promote the economy of my country. As you see, people can improve the economy of their country by traveling and spending money in their own country.
Second, I believe, it is necessary for individuals to travel in their own country in order to learn about the culture and history of their country. For example, about two years ago, my friends and I travel to a city in my country named Shiraz. we didn’t know anything about the city and we want just to have some fun time. so we decided and choose Shiraz as our destiny. when we arrived in Shiraz and after exploring the city, we found out that this city is well-known for its spicy foods and also for its historical places. some buildings in Shiraz are related to two thousand years ago, like Perspolice which is famous for its historic architecture. this experience taught me, people, by traveling to different cities in their country can gain more knowledge about the culture and history of their country.
All in all, for the reasons I have mentioned, I draw a conclusion that people benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. I suggest to everyone to explore every region of their country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92736077482 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65566331626 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484261501211 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7438314142 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7727272727 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111955396953 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362482896951 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320207240855 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0817993570332 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271813059895 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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