Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, we can see tv sets in every places, especially in any houses. tv can have both positive and negative effects and it depends on individuals how they use it. it seems children get more influence from tv than adults. some People may think television advertising directed toward children should not be allowed whereas others argue tv advertising provide good content for children. both sides of arguments have considerable reasons for their claim. Personally, I believe the first one is true for two reasons.
first and foremost, some tv advertising is not apt for children and sometimes it contains unsuitable contents. therefore, they have negative effects on young kids. For instance, every day we see some tv advertising that includes sexual contents which they are not appropriate for youth children and it may have an awful influence on them. another good example is about programs that have scary contents, such programs can have terrible effects on children’s sprite and after a while, they result in fear and low self-confident. So I think children should not be allowed to watch tv advertising directly.
Second, sometimes watching tv programs for many hours are wasting time and also it can cause some illnesses such as obesity, due to lack of physical activity. families could choose another entertainment for their children instead of watching tv. For example, they can let their children to go to some classes like basketball and soccer classes or art and music. In this way, children have an active hobby and also they learn many things. Thereby, they don’t waste their time.
To conclude, I agree with following statement television advertising toward young children should not be allowed because some programs contain unsuitable contents and also they can cause some illnesses like obesity. I suggest families choose an apt tv program which is practical for the creativity of their children and teaches them good things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, may, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23174603175 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74248601252 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536507936508 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.2890922873 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5555555556 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161582477455 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576344498174 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070061881317 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121930269488 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637334914735 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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