It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects to specialize in one specific subject.
In order to make a good life in this competitive and stressful world, humans need to work hard and have knowledge of many fields or one specific field. some people think that it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. While others disagree. In my view, I believe having a great knowledge of a specific subject is better for two important reasons.
first, nowadays, as technology advances in different kinds of fields, many subjects have arisen. it is impossible for people to have knowledge of this widespread subjects. For instance, today, as we see robots have taken the performance of many industrial and medical tasks. A lot of surgeries are performed by robots without human interactions. but how a robot built? it is good question to think about it. robots are made of different parts, like electrical or mechanical parts, and individuals who works in electrical part, they can never take action in mechanical parts. Because each portion need a specific knowledge, and in order to master all parts of a robot, we have to pass many academic courses, that it is roughly infeasible. As you can see it is almost impossible to have knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.
Second, when individuals focus on one subject, they have a deeper understanding of it. On the other hand, people who have concentration on many different topics, they just waste their time and energy. take myself as an example, when I was a first year student in university. I just want to learn many things, so I registered in numerus courses and paid a lot of money. Each courses needed a lot of time and energy to practice, but, due to taking part in different classes, I am not able to focus well on practicing. Furthermore, these courses, not only were they not good but also, they wasted my energy, money and specially my time. this experience taught me, if you want to have a deep understanding of a subject, you need to focus well on it, and eliminate other things that distracting you.
All in all, for the reasons I have mentioned, I draw the conclusion that it is better to have knowledge of specific subject than to learn many academic subject. Finally, I suggest individuals to just focus on a field in order to master it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, so, well, while, for instance, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1920.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76426799007 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76570210181 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478908188586 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0765463213 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2727272727 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3181818182 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50870191543 0.236089414692 215% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15212680414 0.076458572812 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.20889700033 0.0737576698707 283% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.372050422443 0.150856017488 247% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.172465416542 0.0645574589148 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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