Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Generally, School is a place for giving almost every kind of knowledge and provides students with a variety of subjects such as social study, math, science and including physical education. While some people think that physical education is not necessary for being a part of a school subject. They should spend their time on academic subjects which is more important than it. I personally disagree with the point and I reckon that I would be the mandatory subject in school for some reasons which I will explain in this essay.
First of all, the majority of subjects in school mostly uses students’ brain power like Mathematics which needs to utilize their brain to figure out the questions and If they keep using their brain almost all day, beside lunchtime. Just sitting in the classroom for a long period without taking some fresh air or stretching their body. As a result, It makes them feel stressed and it could deteriorate their immunity. After all, Lack of immunity brings about many diseases like flu, cold and dizzy etc. For example, my friend who is in the special program class has to study almost 9 classes which are only math and science. He told me that he has to find some time to exercise because he is really stressful with learning a kind of those things and he feels so sleepy like he is exhausted from studying every time after finishing all classes. therefore, the school should provide the time for relaxation and it is also beneficial to their health which is most likely to be physical education or P.E. However, I am sure that Exercise is the best medicine for them and it could reduce their stress which caused by learning so hard. They can have fun playing some sports and it can refresh their brain to not be too stressed.
Secondly, It is the truth that no one is not good at everything. Although they are not skillful in learning academic studies, They may be good at physical activities or sports. If the school doesn’t have the physical class, They wouldn’t have the opportunity to look for their aptitude and show their ability to their teacher. It leads to no improvement for them and cuts the chance of being a good athlete which is not a bad career at all. There are many successful athletes in this world for example,
Usain Bolt who broke the world record of running competition and the well-known football player, Cristiano Ronaldo, is one of the highest paid football players in this world.So, If the school provides this subject, they can practice their ability of sport and they have P.E teacher to give them some suggestions which leads to their development and finally they could become what they dream of.
To conclude, Having physical subjects in every school day has plenty of benefits in various ways like students can take this time to take some rest from serious studying and It another a good chance to follow their dream if they are good at playing some sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, after all, as to, for example, i reckon, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76125244618 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45094487775 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500978473581 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.0834724208 48.9658058833 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.166666667 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3888888889 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2222222222 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2008580298 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716531744492 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060125531373 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124608141361 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761695275134 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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