Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?
The choice of whether or not giving money to beggars totally depends on the one who offers. however, the question whether the people are doing right or wrong by giving money becomes imperative. personally, I believe it is a wrong decision to offer money to the beggars on the street. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, a small offering today by a person to the poor can become a habit of tomorrow. Hence, beggars would start thinking that they can easily earn money by begging and there is no need to do work to earn their living. For instance, I recently visited Haridwar a Hindu pilgrimage place. I went there to take a bath in the holy water of river Ganga. there I found that on ghats plenty of beggars are sitting on the stairs asking for the money, seeing their pathetic situation I was influenced and agreed to offer them money. however, I visited the same place again and was amazed to see the beggar whom I gave money yesterday was today eating lunch in a restaurant and is in a a lot better condition which I saw yesterday. this made me wonder that it is a wrong decision to give money to such people as they have considered begging and duping innocent people as their career and if I am giving them money I am actually promoting the culture of begging.
Secondly, due to our habit of offering money to the needy we are actually harming the life of some children. seeing benefit in the begging culture some people has made a business out of it. As a result, many children are captured from their home and forced into this tradition, which is making their life difficult for them to live as begging cannot be the best way of earning money. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. About five years ago, an incident happened in my Uncle's home that his six year old son who was playing in the lawn suddenly, goes missing. he called my family and we looked for him everywhere but could not find him. Eventually, we went to the police to help us. police being aware of such kidnapping was easily able to trace my Uncle's son and get him back to us. The police told us that he was kidnapped by a gang which makes the children to beg and earn money for them. however, police hampered their plan. Therefore, we should always abstain from giving money because this habit might be costing someone his life.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that we should never give offerings to the poor. this is because they start to think their career in begging and because begging culture have inspired some to start a business out of it and earn some good money by using kids for begging purposes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47755102041 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31675353432 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49387755102 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4953982572 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4166666667 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4166666667 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27580206671 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764791814602 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747490385631 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194346017212 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865921926755 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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