Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree?
In the history of humanity, a number of animal species are extinct. This has become a significant issue that needs to immediately solve. However, some people argue that farmland, housing, and industry are imperative for our lives, while others believe that land should be used for saving endangered animals. As far as I am concerned, I personally believe that we should pay attention to the use of land for animal's existence, and I will explore the reasons in the subsequent paragraphs.
First and foremost, people should care about the animals' extinction because it harms the environment. Flora and fauna, have a symbiosis relationship, that is, both importantly benefits each other existence. Therefore, if animals are extinct, this will adversely affect the balance of nature. For instance, flowers and bees have a symbiosis relationship, so they help each other to mature and reproduce. Flowers provide nutrients to bees, while bees help flowers germinate. This means that if bees are extinct, flowers will not be able to germinate, and they will be extinct. Moreover, plants are, in fact, significant nutrients to not only insects and animals but also humans. Therefore, both animals' and plants' extinction will certainly harm our beings. As you can see, this clearly demonstrates why we should save endangered animals.
Secondly, another fact that supports my standpoint is that many industries not only destroy the environment but also damage people's health. Although industries and farmland are necessary for humans, excessive manufacturing emits a great amount of carbon dioxide, the major factor of climate change. To illustrate this, these days, excessive deforestation occurs in many countries for building factories that emit pollution into oceans and lands. These factories constantly harm the environment, and they are not invigilated enough about their negative effects. As a result, both humans and animals living with air pollution and contaminated water will have higher risk of developing malicious diseases, such as diarrhea and acute allergy. In this case, reducing industrial factories and increasing more woodlands are better for humans and animals.
In conclusion, I firmly maintain the belief that we should use our land for saving endangered animals. This is due to the fact that animals are essential to the environment, and too many manufacturing industries directly harms our health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 50, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
... foremost, people should care about the animals extinction because it harms the environ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45866666667 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86762774587 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0535709232 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4761904762 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61904761905 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265506793053 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074127939708 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710571973032 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175466338157 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651742174242 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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