Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Although the world seems to be an ever increasing place in which we need to claim more land for farming, housing, and industry, the truth is that those demands can be met while also preserving wild lands. The current farmland across the globe is sufficient, what needs improvement is distribution and waste issues. Another factor that would improve global space issues would be the creation of denser living spaces. Alongside those fixes, the creation of smarter means of travel would improve issues of space. Humans don’t need more land; we simply need to use our land smarter.
The vast amount of farmland across the world currently supports a large population of eaters. Despite this vast amount of food many people are still starving. One way to improve this problem is to improve the means by which food is distributed throughout the world. Those places that can provide should provide. More importantly, however, are problems of waste. Much food is thrown into landfills every day. If people treated food more like a prized possession then less would be wasted and more would be available for distribution. Similarly, we waste a great amount of food feeding livestock that is an unnecessary part of our diet. If we shipped and ate the many grains it takes to produce meat, fewer people would be starving.
Another fix to the problems of space is increasing human density in living spaces. In large metropolises across the globe people live comfortable lives existing in high densities. The suburban sprawl of some American cities and the accompanying green lawns and expansive golf courses are an unnecessary use of space. People should not be living in harsh environments that encourage low density and high use of energy to fuel and water those distant parts of the planet. If people simply lived in closer quarters, sharing space and resources, then the human race would require fewer square miles on which to live.
A further solution to distributing resources and decreasing land use is the implementation of better travel methods. The United States is covered coast to coast with roads and highways. If people instead utilized high-speed trains and more local forms of public transportation then the land taken up by roads would be unnecessary. This would also require that people manufacture and buy more products created within their area rather than buying and shipping things across the globe.
Thus the problems of land space on the globe are truly a problem of poor use rather than a legitimate lack of space. More space could be dedicated to wild animals if people improved their food use and distribution. Similarly we could be living in higher density and traveling smarter in order to reduce our global footprint. Then more open areas on the planet would simply appear out of intelligent use of our space.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, similarly, so, still, then, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2386.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05508474576 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56521868134 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497881355932 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.781228267 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3703703704 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4814814815 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152369464318 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447655831562 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394034010106 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0929443671579 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186457869867 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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