Some people think that human needs for farmland housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals Do you agree or disagree with this point of view Why or why not Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Our world is full of diversity. It has got a varied number of animals, birds, species and humans are one of them. The way nature is created maintains balance and equilibrium to make this world a better place to live for all animals and creatures. So will this balance be maintained if this world turns out to be a place fulfilling only the needs of humans? This topic has raised quite a stir all over the world. Nowadays the ideology of "conservation of animals" started with the humans realizing how animals is also an important part of this world and how we are dependent on them to live a sustainable life. So in all situations I would disagree with the statement that farmland, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Various reasons can be cited in support of this statement which i will discuss further in this essay.

First, we humans being considered the most intelligent species on earth has taken this power as granted. We think that we can have control on anything possible. So in order to fulfill one's self need we keep on constructing industry, housing, farmland without even bothering how badly it might impact other animals living on this earth. Our dependency on animals are the main reason we can never ignore their reduction in numbers. For instance, take the example of cow, nowadays people have increased consumption of cow to such a great extent that artificial hormones are given to young cows so that they can attain maturity within a short time and can provide milk and large enough to be used as a meat.But we simple forget how such huge number of cows injected with artificial hormones eject methane gas and that accounts almost half percent of global pollution. So by destroying natural number of cows, we are somehow shortening the lifespan of humans indirdectly without even realizing its long term negative impact.

Second, the animals that surround us somehow contributes to our environment. Be it a tiger, deer, elephant, beer, monkeys and even birds. Their far-reaching contributions often gets ignored compare to the readily earned profits out of human usage like industries, houses and agriculture. This can be explained more clearly if we take the example of mobile phones. Nowadays mobile phone holds a crucial place in every home and this great demands of it have given rise to large number of staellites, wi-fi services and other networks which generates Hi-frequency disturbing the nerve impulses of birds, thus reducing great proportions of birds all over the world. Do we really hear birds chirping early in the morning as we get to hear almost 10 years back? The answer is no, we hardly get to hear birds sounds nowadays. So a space of technology has almost lead to a decline of a species. But how does this affects us, have we ever thought? Birds used to pollinated which has given rise to a number of vegetation in various different places. Birds ven preyed on insects which prevented insects from eating most of the harvestation. But now this ecological balance is disturbed through its decline.

Thus it is the responsibility of everyone to maintain this world as nature has provided us with. If we disturb its pattern to fetch our own self interest, this will add more to our deterioration.So humans should always makes room for advancement by construction of industries, farmland, housing but not at the cost of harming the animals by taking away their land. they are part of the nature and they have all right to be in it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, thus, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2931.0 1977.66487455 148% => OK
No of words: 602.0 407.700716846 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86877076412 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95335121839 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71615206434 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 312.0 212.727598566 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518272425249 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 912.6 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.3861481302 48.9658058833 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.068965517 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7586206897 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.06896551724 5.45110844103 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204437979559 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527606319359 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646071206198 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133192862909 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063958973961 0.0645574589148 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 86.8835125448 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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