Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
There is no shortage of debate about whether it is better for young adults to get independence from their parents as soon as possible or to stay with their families for a long time. In my opinion, it is advantageous for young adults to get independence from their parents as soon as possible. I think this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, independence from parents means that a person can take their(mistake) own decisions. When a person takes his own decisions and is independent, he is happier and more successful. For instance, my best friend wanted to be a professional athlete. But, his parents were forcing him to become a lawyer like his father so that he has stability in his life and is safe. His parents told him that no matter how hard he tries, he will never be able to become a professional athlete. My friend left his home and worked alone to become the man he wanted to be. He trained hard for two years and proved himself in various competitions. As a result, he enjoys a successful career as an athlete, lives a luxurious life and meets celebrities and other well-known people on a regular basis. In addition to this, it was only possible because he took his own decisions and became independent. I strongly believe it is worthwhile to become independent from your parents.
Secondly, parents provide us with a safe environment to live. They cover us with this safe warm blanket that is the comfort zone and protect us from the evil of this world. Young adults need to put themselves out there in the world to leave this comfort zone. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I used to feel very comfortable living in my home because I had food on my table and never used to run out of money. Later, I joined a university and took admission in the on-campus dormitory. I started facing many difficulties as for the first time in my life I had to learn to cook, do my laundry and perform other daily work to sustain myself. Moreover, I used to run out of money frequently and had to compensate for that by working part-time. As a result, I learned various skill sets like managing expenses, doing household chores and time management. I understood that to survive and sustain myself in this world I will have to work very hard and developed gratitude for what I had or achieved. Accordingly, I think independence opens up a person to various possibilities.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that freedom from parents for people is very important. It gives young adults the power to make their own decisions, introduces them to hardships and helps in their overall growth and development.
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Suggestion:
...n their overall growth and development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, as for, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65750528541 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79099716504 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494714587738 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1831770759 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7307692308 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1923076923 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65384615385 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305948225229 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813047642347 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978575575354 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221724809493 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147509719756 0.0645574589148 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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