Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples
It is the dream of most parents to see their wards prosper and this has been proven in different ways and ensuring their wards are independent is inclusive. Personally, I prefer independent young adults to those that are solely dependent on their parents as well as living with them for a longer period. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, as adulthood sets in, one needs to be independent. This is true, because in life, one is faced by one challenge or the other which one has to make several decisions solely; thus, young adults should be handed their independence by their parents. Moreover, independency gives every adult in our society today a sense of responsibility since their a widely held belief that adults that lives in their parents’ houses are somewhat irresponsible. So, as an adult, one is expected to have started a family, fend for them as well as contribute towards the development of one’s immediate society. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. I could remember, while I was in college, I lived on campus, in fact I lived in a single apartment where I do all the cooking, cleaning amongst other chores myself. During these periods, I had to work to save for some college expenses not totally depending on my parents’ contribution towards my education. This actually makes me feel like I am responsible for every thing that happens to me.
Furthermore, the young adults need create their own paths towards success in their endeavours. Though families play a vital role in ensuring the success of all its members, thereby accommodating its members under the same roof, but an adult that strive on his or her own to carve out an empire or rent an apartment is held at a higher esteem when compared with one that depends solely on the family for accommodation. For instance, as soon as my brother, Hammed graduated from University, he continued living with us and my dad being a someone that is irascible, frustrates him every day because he could not get a job. He was always upbraiding him instead of admonishing him. At the long run, Hammed got a job with a card printing company where he works from morning till evening on weekdays and sometimes on weekends too. After a while he saw the need for independency, and had to rent an apartment close to his place of work. There he was able to break from my dad’s incessant pestering and now he has his independence, he could take certain decisions with little or no input from the family and as such transformed his life positively.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young adults should be handed their independence as soon as possible. This would afford them the opportunity to solely face life challenges, make decisions on their own as well as create their own paths towards success in all their endeavours.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2380.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77911646586 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79593074921 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532128514056 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 755.1 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5416398907 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308429439958 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962159930933 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0870856869729 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208637373708 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492409311851 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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