Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
The above mentioned line states that some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Others prefer to live with their families for a longer time. I personally thinks that latter situation is better than former one. I feel this way due to two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with living with family for a young adults have lots of merits such as family moral support, guidance and how to be a responsible person. Family constantly provides moral support to young people when they are going through bad times of their life as well as corrects them whenever they do anything wrong, this cannot be possible for the young adults which lived far away from their families. My personal example can illustrate my point that my friend was working in a tech company as a web developer, living far away from his family. He got in depression as there was no one with whom he can share his work pressure and ultimately got sick so he took work from home and started living with his own family. He shared his work pressure with them and in return his family cheered him non stop ultimately he got healthy and his efficiency to do the work also increased. Therefore, living with family provides moral support to young people.
Furthermore, family needs their young members at the time of emergency, if they live away from their family it might not be possible for them to reach to their family at correct time. For example my friends father slipped from stairs and badly injured his legs unable to get up and only his mother was their at home as my friend lives in another town. His mother didn't know how to drive a car so they had to call ambulance but ambulance came late. His father got admitted to hospital after two hours of excruciating pain, my friend regrets it as if he was present at that time then his father didn't have to bear pain for this much time. So it is better for young people to live with their family so that any emergency comes they are the ones to handle it first.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is better for the young people to live with their families rather live far away from them just because to get independence from them. This is because young people also need their family members and vice versa.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
...amilies for a longer time. I personally thinks that latter situation is better than fo...
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Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'adult'?
Suggestion: adult
...gin with living with family for a young adults have lots of merits such as family mora...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...riend lives in another town. His mother didnt know how to drive a car so they had to ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...as present at that time then his father didnt have to bear pain for this much time. S...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54347826087 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24867811061 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480676328502 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5723755529 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.647058824 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3529411765 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402515447927 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159365352984 0.076458572812 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120082477197 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294276174112 0.150856017488 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0932433868722 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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