Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their family for a longer time. Which of these solutions do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
There is no shortage of opinion on whether it is better to live for a long time with parents or not. In my opinion it is better that young adults should get independence.I feel this way for two main reasons, which i will be explaining in the subsequent paragraph.
First of all it depends on the individual that whether he/she wants to live an independent life.In my opinion all young adults should carry out their basic task without being dependent on parents.Their parents should make sure that they make their child carry out certain task on their own . This will eventually help the child to face real world problems. This does not mean that the child will be totally prepared but at least would have some knowledge about how to encounter certain problems.Parents should keep watch at the behavior of their child and should also condemn their inappropriate actions , while parents believe in freedom. They should help the child to understand the difference between what is right and wrong.
Secondly , living an independent life will help the young adult to mature at an early age. The child would make mistakes and would learn form the mistake and this would eventually help the child to tackle problems. We always tend to learn from our expierence and mistake and if one starts this process at an early age, it could prove beneficial in the longer run. Each and every one of us will have to carry out task on our own so it would be beneficial that we start to deal with the problems at an early age by not being dependent on our parents.When i was in college , i had to manage my basic expense along with academic load and this expirence helped me develop the ability to manage different task at the same time. Every one has to face consequences based on the decision they make and in order to have a positive output in one has to be adroit in decision making.
Finally the choice of living an independent life totally depends on the person. Some might urge independence at an earlier age while some would love to live with their parents for a longer period of time but according to my perspective everyone should develop the basic ability to face real world problem at an young age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, as to, at least, i feel, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65809768638 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50221043239 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470437017995 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.2220776765 48.9658058833 186% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.384615385 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9230769231 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206601837145 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829186449184 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781247416834 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161039088701 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064830615715 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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