Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Although is more difficult to live alone and have our independence, I think that is better young adults that want their independence as soon as possible. I have two reasons to support my opinions.
First, the people always fell better when they have our own privacy. One of the questions is that when a young adult have their privacy, he tends to do the things of her way. My mother is a person very severe, and when I am in her house I need do everything of her ways. For example, when I began my college I started lived alone, since I needed moving of city. It was wonderful since I can do everything of my way. To illustrate, my mother never got I have a dog, and the first thing that I did was foster a dog. Although my mother doesn't live with me, she didn't like of this idea. So that, I percived that is great when we have our independence and can do everthink that we want.
Second, we have many things that we like to do when we are living without parents, on the other hand, we need much more responsibility. Since we have our independence, the bills like water, internet, phone etc. is for own cont, and this makes we think about how we need to comport in the house. For example, when I was in the university living with my roommates, we always enjoyed to spent a long time having a shower, and after one month when the count arrived, we perceived how expensive where the bill. This mades us think how careful we need be with this thing of the house because when we are living with our parents we don't attempt for this things.
In conclusion, I think that is better have my independence for the reasons that I already saw. Besides that, when we have our privacy, we tend to grow more in relating the responsibilities and we make people stronger than other people, since that the people live with parents tend to have all things easy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, second, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.35260115607 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45481060201 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459537572254 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5475358572 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5882352941 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3529411765 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178300014782 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743491998303 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0901664573516 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151888308539 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084756949057 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.95 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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