Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
In the argument presented by the author, he affirm that if the skateboarding is prohibited in Central Plaza, the shoppers will increase. Slice, with increase of skateboarding in the area, have a decrease of shoppers because some problems. One problem is that with increase skate boarding have to an increase of vandalism.
In this claim, there is no evidence enough to support the argument. Is possible that have others factor in the area of the Center Plaza that can be influencing the decrease of shoppers. Thus, the author needs to make it clear, punting if there other things that could be related with shoppers. For example, there was a place that was built a skateboarding, and did not do any problem like vandalism. On the contrary, the place become more valorized and safer because the increase people in the place.
In addiction to lacking evidence, the argument presented a weak evidence. Since a built is construed in a place, it always tend make the area more valued. However, sometimes need a little investment in security. One example, in my city, was built a place for the teens practices sports, was observed that was necessary increases the security because the rob and violence. Thus, the politicians that was responsible to this area, put a lot rules, like the times that the park was open and finish and others, so that, finished with the problems.
To strengthen the author argument, is necessary more assumptions among the facts. Is valid think in relation among the Center Plaza with the crimes that are occurring, taking into account other possible assumptions? However, is necessary more information about other possibilities that have relation with the decrease of shoppers? Since that, many things can relate with the situation in the Central Plaza.
Although the author made a flaw argument, he can improve the argument, so that he put more evidences and assuptions.Thus, the argument can do very strong.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: On the contrary, the place become more valorized and safer because the increase people in the place.
Error: valorized Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Although the author made a flaw argument, he can improve the argument, so that he put more evidences and assuptions.Thus, the argument can do very strong.
Error: assuptions Suggestion: assumptions
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 322 350
No. of Characters: 1561 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.236 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.848 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.59 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.971 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In the argument presented by the author,...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 51, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'affirms'.
Suggestion: affirms
...he argument presented by the author, he affirm that if the skateboarding is prohibited...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng have to an increase of vandalism. In this claim, there is no evidence enou...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se the increase people in the place. In addiction to lacking evidence, the ar...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'tends'?
Suggestion: tends
...uilt is construed in a place, it always tend make the area more valued. However, som...
^^^^
Line 5, column 357, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ecessary increases the security because the rob and violence. Thus, the politicians tha...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...so that, finished with the problems. To strengthen the author argument, is ne...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the situation in the Central Plaza. Although the author made a flaw argument...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...at he put more evidences and assuptions.Thus, the argument can do very strong.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, thus, for example, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06542056075 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76885884848 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489096573209 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6279532508 57.8364921388 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.3333333333 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.70786347227 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124005106066 0.218282227539 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467784910525 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623034024987 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0802751894139 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792745043885 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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