College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
One of thinks that many people think when are looking for a job is a salary, on other hand there are people that find be happiness. Therefore, I don’t agree with the argument that the college students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to job. Since that students have be happy in your job.
My first reason that I don’t agree with the statement is becuase that we need study that we like. Due to when we study and job something that we don’t like meke us bad. Second pscologist that I’ve been reading on newspaper, the job of one person need be something that she or he love, because when we work in something that we don’t like we can get ill. For exemple when I was in college, there are some people that stayed with depression because they were doing the course thinking on the money and didn’t because they liked. Thus, getting clear that is necessary study something that you like.
My second reason relate with thought that some people have (we need study a course that in the future we are able to win a lot of money and be rich) and I don’t agree with this. Since that people direc your ideia on the money, many times they loss the focus and don’t do a good course because they stay desistimulated. The money is important, but it not be in the first attemption. For exempla a professior I have in college that had depression because she was doing a course that she didn’t like, and she always say for us that is necessary study really things wich we love.
Third, when you study a course that you love, you will be good and always shall have job for you. Like some biologist, teatcher and others profissions that are said bad profission have great profissionals. Like some biologist that have tv program, they have study a lot, but I have certly that they make ther study with love. Therefore, it’s clean that always all us have chance to have a good jobe and be happy
In conlusion, I agree completaly with argument since, when we think only money and forget the studies we can get bad and ill. Thus, I belive that the students need study that they like and not only in the salary, because the salary is consequence of our success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 328, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s that seem most likely to lead to job. Since that students have be happy in your job...
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Line 2, column 353, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...o lead to job. Since that students have be happy in your job. My first reason tha...
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Line 3, column 294, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'loves'.
Suggestion: loves
...person need be something that she or he love, because when we work in something that...
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Line 5, column 363, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...ted. The money is important, but it not be in the first attemption. For exempla a ...
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Line 7, column 86, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
... you will be good and always shall have job for you. Like some biologist, teatcher ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, look, really, second, so, therefore, third, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 35.0 11.3162921348 309% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 78.0 33.0505617978 236% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 410.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56585365854 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39527097048 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.417073170732 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4044690241 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.117647059 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1176470588 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52941176471 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183957911078 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813111785052 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109626842236 0.0758088955206 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126624583376 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891001055326 0.0667264976115 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.8420337079 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.38706741573 82% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 100.480337079 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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