Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion
Living independently is a heart desire for many people especially the young in order not to be controlled, supervised, and guided by their families. On the other hand, some young adults enjoy having a sense of familiarity by living with their families for a while. Personally, I am inclined to the latter group as I belong to a country which domesticated its citizens to have an independent life after marriage. The following paragraphs will underline the significant reasons of living with a family is better than living severally.
There are some points that should be taken into consideration for deciding to live independently or not which are safeness, time consuming, and the cost of life. Being with a family can make a person feel safer than being individually since worries, fearfulness, and tension can be experienced more by someone who is living individually. In addition, having someone who handles with you the household works can enable you to save more time and spent it on studying or working. Besides, no one can deny the fact that the cost of life now is exponentially increasing, so living with a family can lower the expenses of the daily life.
Furthermore, living within a family can teach a person the value of cooperation, caring, sharing and love. Whenever a young person have such values, (s)he can be able to have the primary responsibility for his/her own future kids and own families. Besides, being with a family for a long time can intensify the social relationships between parents and their kids and that can be reflected on their whole life. In other words, when a family being together for a while, they can sort out any problems they might face. Contrary, living independently can lead a person to selfishness and isolation which can adversely affect their life and relationships.
As a conclusion, the benefits of living with the family cannot be compared with the benefits that can be acquired during living separately since the group concerns for me is more important than the individual concerns. No one may regret from living with his or her family for a while, but there could be some moments of regression from living lonely since anyone definitely would miss the sense of familiarity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, if, may, so, while, in addition, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97066666667 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87115927032 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514666666667 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 30.5698471628 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.266666667 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256826076788 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108400761386 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729950601642 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181228735208 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757233140064 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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