Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
When children become adults, they are more vulnerable to society. This phase of life is very crucial to their social and their personal life. While some young adults prefer independence from their parents, others want to live with their families for a longer time. If I would, in this case, then I would prefer to live with my family for a longer time. It is because of several reasons and their importance which are detailed in below paragraphs.
Firstly, combined family supports young adults in their adverse situations. There are several persons in the family that can help the adults with money, advice and with other supports during the worst time of adult. For instance, when I was studying in the class 12th in New Delhi, then just before the final exam I had met a measurable bike accident that broke my left leg and also several other injuries in the body. Initially, I was admitted to a local hospital by an stranger then, my family shifted me to the best hospital in my city. My parents took very care of all my treatments. My father informed my head of school about my accident so that I could get extension for my final exam. Because of good treatment and good care in the hospital, I was discharged earlier and also due to the extension, I could give the exam properly and passed in the good grade. If I was not living with my family, I would have a very bad day, and it could be also possible that I would have to study next for the same class 12th.
Secondly, when adults live with their parents, adults are generally away from the negative elements of society like drugs, drinking, and others. Parents always motivate their children to away from smoking, drinking, and other such kind of stuffs. For instance, when I was in the college in IIT BHU in Varanasi, then there are several students who live in a hostel and few students live with their parents as Varanasi was their hometown. So, during college days, I have noticed that students living in the hostels generally start drinking, smoking, late night parties earlier as compared to students who are living with their parents in the same town. It happens because, when adults get freedom, they are vulnerable to their surrounding environment. They try such drugs in the hostels, as there is no-one in the hostel to keep eye on them.
All in all, parents are very important at every stage of their children life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... at every stage of their children life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1973.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65330188679 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35617693122 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47641509434 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3371071605 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.65 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361460916627 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123253243648 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142367461266 0.0737576698707 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228373567528 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140217044409 0.0645574589148 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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