Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
“Independence is a special latitudinarian which the young adults should be adorned” Tara Westover, Educated, 2018. What is the exact time for independence? Even though believing that some young adults should experience independency from their parents as soon as possible, others repudiate this Idea and think that young adults should spend more time to live with their families. Indeed, I am of the same mind with the latter opinion. From my perspective, not only can it provide more financial supports for the young adults but also it fills their emotional gaps effectively. As well as, parents have a great experience which will help young adults. In the following, I am inclined to elucidate my schemes and opinion.
First and foremost, one of the part-and-parcel the young adults’ needs is financial supports. For instance, according to the official statistics derived from the USA National Center for Statistics, nowadays, crime rates increase since many young adults cannot afford their costs. In other words, inadequate financial supports promote people toward doing crimes and felonies. Thus, by appropriate, apropos financial supports given by parents, crime rates will take the nosedive indirectly.
Another thing coming to the mind is that parents could fill out the emotional gaps of their young adults. These problems reduce people’s tolerance in facing with the various thorny issues. As a consequence, not only the emotional gaps promote people’s violence but also it influences on the next generation. Indeed, it is a negative domino effect which impresses other generation for a long time. Therefore, to mitigate the unwarranted effects of emotional gaps, the young adults should live with their parents or families for a longer time.
Last but not least, no prize for guessing that the parents have a great experience than their young adults. For instance, in the tortuous way of the life, they can guide their scions and then keep them from the hazardous unwarranted events. On the other hand, in the regions where the young adults are experiencing their independency very soon, both the crime rates and personal failures’ rate are augmented. Hence, it seems fair to say that families or parents take a center stage in guiding their young adults.
In the sum, despite the conventional wisdom that the young adults should be independence from their parents as soon as possible, I think that they can live with their families for a longer time because they can be supported financially and emotionally, furthermore, they can be taught by their parents’ experiences. If young adults have spent more time with their parents, societies would have not confronted with various problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, another thing, for instance, i think, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2312.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35185185185 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90350867991 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49537037037 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5467036649 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.090909091 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476077903281 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140319393744 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104861102121 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290917436718 0.150856017488 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776533020507 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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