Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Independence plays a very important role in one's life and their career. Many young adults wish to attain independence of their life from their parents as soon as possible, while some prefer to live with their parents for longer time. Accoding to me, living with your parents is better than living alone for two reasons.
First, parting away from parents at a young age might cause serious problems in an adult's life. These issues can range from managing their mundane tasks to handling their financial as well as education costs. For instance, one of my cousin moved out of his parent's home to leave an independent life at a very young age which cost him his career. He was able to handle to handle all his college and residential expenses for a short time and was soon in debt even though he used to work part time after his college. This not only affected his academics but also got him into bad company later. Now, in this case if he had stayed with parents he could have avoided these problems and had lead a better life.
Secondly, parents have already experienced more in this world than their children. This experience always helps in guiding and supporting the young child in difficult times. Living independently or freely with no or very little experience in life as a young age often leads to individuals getting in wrong habits too. For example, I did not take any driving classes and learned driving a car on my own just by observing my father and following his instructions. I can drive better at a young age and this would not have been possible if I had planned to live an independent life. His guidance has always taught me do's and don't's of driving a vehicle.
Thus, wanting independence from parents at a young age can result in negative outcomes which can be avoided if they prefer to live with their families for a longer time. In doing so, they can manage all their problems and always get a guidance in difficult times of their life. If more youngsters prefer living with their parents instead of living independent then this will not only improve their relationships with their family members but also help society get better as a whole.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 45, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...pendence plays a very important role in ones life and their career. Many young adult...
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Line 5, column 84, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
... age might cause serious problems in an adults life. These issues can range from manag...
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Line 5, column 359, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'to handle'.
Suggestion: to handle
... which cost him his career. He was able to handle to handle all his college and residential expense...
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Line 5, column 486, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...oon in debt even though he used to work part time after his college. This not only affect...
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Line 5, column 686, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'leaded', 'led'.
Suggestion: leaded; led
...uld have avoided these problems and had lead a better life. Secondly, parents h...
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Line 9, column 211, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...es. Living independently or freely with no or very little experience in life as a ...
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Line 9, column 379, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to drive'.
Suggestion: to drive
...ot take any driving classes and learned driving a car on my own just by observing my fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68146214099 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42744590939 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514360313316 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9983755338 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6111111111 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2777777778 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408036098578 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132184116504 0.076458572812 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119659323548 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286174451256 0.150856017488 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125755016157 0.0645574589148 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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