Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Prompt: Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Spending a great amount of time in sporting activities has both positive and negative impacts on children's lives. It is vital that children grow holistically from childhood by evolving in numerous activities. The advantages and disadvantages related to spending plenty of time practicing sport for children will be discussed in the following essay.
On one hand, providing children a thorough education is encouraging to practice skills that benefit them whether or not they are able to notice it. For instance, spending time practicing football will allow children to develop this specific skill that may help them in the future. As an example, the football player, Cristiano Ronaldo started to play football early in his life. Because he nurtured that skill from childhood, he is currently one of the legendary football player in the world. Moreover, practicing sport is a way that helps parents to raise their children effectively. Many children spend most of their time wandering along the streets. That not only puts their lives in danger but also affects parents' health, for they are anxious whenever they cannot locate their children. For instance, I met two little boys who were playing in tunnels in the street of Kigali. One of them was almost knocked down by an automibile. His parents were unaware of where he was. Had he been involved in a professional sport, his parents could have checked on his situation with the responsible of the group.
On the other hand, sport activities do not benefit everyone. In fact, many parents enroll their children in activities such as dance, music, football, etc. to help them feel the sense of belonging to a great community. Some kids grow better in communities. However, others are uncomfortable in huge communities. Thus, putting them in a community, such as a sport team will hinder their development and growth. For instance, one of my friend called Amy, who was forced to join a soccer club by his parents, used to dodge all the practices not because he disliked soccer but because he was not able to learn to play football among many children. Furthermore, sport activities negatively affect people when they over participate in them. Although sport is helpful for people to remain heathy, it can also make them lose focus on their priorities. For example, some little boys in my hometown loved their sport clubs so much that they would dodge school in order to continue practicing sport. Practicing sport harms introverts people who are uncomfortable of holding on teamwork and deviate people from their trajectory to their objectives.
In conclusion, practicing sport has both positive and negative effect. Because practicing sport most often include a team, it has the disadvantage of not being of great benefit to introverts people because they are uncomfortable to work in groups. Despite the disadvantage associated to sport, it helps children to have specific things to do instead of wandering in the streets for example. In addition, practicing sport is a great way for children to learn a skill.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'practicing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: practicing
...ren a thorough education is encouraging to practice skills that benefit them whether or not...
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ng to practice skills that benefit them whether or not they are able to notice it. For instanc...
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Suggestion:
...om childhood, he is currently one of the legendary football player in the world. ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vantage of not being of great benefit to introverts people because they are uncom...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, as for, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2734.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 532.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13909774436 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76555506983 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481203007519 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.1515203781 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4375 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.625 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335882357679 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989065300537 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125964075796 0.0737576698707 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.323293545912 0.150856017488 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.320961390583 0.0645574589148 497% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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