For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
In today’s progressive world where we live, it is necessary for people to possess a diverse amount of skills and talents in order to become successful in their jobs and personal life. Communicating properly with others and being high-educated are the most significant characteristics in becoming successful. Some people are the proponent of the notion that social interaction is the most vital element of being successful; however, I think that studying hard is more essential than relating well to people in becoming a successful person in any occupation. My viewpoint is based on a few reasons, two compelling ones of which have been elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, given today’s industrial and high-tech world, companies and institutes increasingly incline to hire speciality and high-educated people, which means that the existence of computers and high-tech machines in factories and industries has increased the required level to such individuals in handling and installing them. Studying in educational centres like colleges and gaining a degree in a special field of study are the best opportunities in getting the knowledge needed for vocations and eventually becoming well-educated which is the pillar of success. For instance, electronic companies and startups are willing to employ those candidates who have a higher education degree or a better educational background in computer and electronic matters. These companies stand on the notion that such well-educated individuals as good navigators can make them prosper and help them to become a pioneer in competing with other companies. As a result of this, the avenue of access will more likely open to us if we study hard at school or universities.
Furthermore, being well-educated and studying hard in educational environments can help and boost one’s communicational skills. In this way, it is noteworthy that becoming high-educated provide people with opportunities to bolster their social interaction ability which is one of the essential factors in making a person successful. Indeed, studying in educational centres is like two edges of a sword, since various purposes will be fulfilled in this regard. Not only do people become knowledgeable and mastered, but also they can improve their communication ability, both of which are the most significant building blocks of becoming successful. My own experience is a good example of what I mean. Following high-school graduation, I was rejected in every job interviews because I was an introverted person and did not know anything about the rules of communication. However, now I am a very successful manager since I have learned how to interact with others such as classmates, staff and professors in addition to mastering in my special field during my educational time in university.
In a nutshell, having considered all the aforementioned reasons, I maintain that people should become high-educated than merely having social interaction properly with others in order to become a successful person. Not only do studying hard in educational centres raise the chance of hiring by eminent companies, but it also boosts our communication ability simultaneously.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, well, for instance, i mean, i think, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2712.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47878787879 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26243924785 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523232323232 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 864.9 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.8288140628 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.666666667 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222790679958 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073312358468 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759929090665 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15432975657 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486401560191 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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