For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Without any shadow of a doubt, choosing and commencing a job is an evitable juncture in the life of most people, since nowadays, living without money is impossible. With this in mind, some people believe that it stands to reason that in order for success in a future job, the ability to communicate with individuals is more important than studying hard in school and education, while others hold the opposite view. I, personally, subscribe to the first attitude for a quite a few reasons, three substantial of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The most compelling reason is that since the dawn of humanity, human beings have been bestowed with an irreplaceable gift: communication. Different people communicate with others for various reasons, but communication in the workplace plays a pivotal role--or, to put it in another way, communication in workplace can be either the best friend, or the worst enemy. Communication improve overall organizational culture so that it improves relationship between management and stuff, which helps employees to understand that they are the corner stone of a successful company rather than an insignificant factor. Hence, they will work willingly, which leads to increase productivity; additionally, companies benefit form with a proper relationship between management and stuff owing to the fact that workers can enjoy a better understanding regarding their companies’ goals, which aid companies to catch their targets faster. Moreover, communication brings workers about a friendly. As a result, communication leads to make profit for companies in general and enhance workers' job satisfaction in particular. As a point in view, my sister's workplace atmosphere is highly friendly, she really likes her job.
Another interpretation as to why I do not concur with the latter attitude in the introductory paragraph lies in the fact that in today's modern world, every company has to be in rush so as to not to be left behind in contending for the "field of competition", and they constantly strive to gain more marker share. Recently, relationship marketing has received a considerable attention by companies, which consists of marketing activities based on long-time relationship with costumers rather than short-time relationship. According to a research conducted by one of the most reputable business universities in my country, communication enjoys a vital role in relationship marketing, and helps a company to achieve the consistent competitive advantage, and thus increases productivity. I illustrate my point with the story that happened to me, two years ago, when I work in a company as a sale manager, I managed to appeal some leading corporations to purchase our products--thanks to applying relationship marketing strategy and my person-to person relationships with customers.
In summary, having considered all the aforementioned ingredients discussed above, I firmly endorse my point of view that even though studying hard in school has its own merits for being success in a future job, the merits of people's ability to relate people in an appropriate manner outweigh those of studying hard on the grounds that it not only enhances workplace culture, but also brings companies about consistent competitive advantage due to improving companies' relationship marketing, which leads to higher productivity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 379, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'improves'.
Suggestion: improves
...iend, or the worst enemy. Communication improve overall organizational culture so that ...
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Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... world, every company has to be in rush so as to not to be left behind in contending for...
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Line 4, column 259, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate manner" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...its of peoples ability to relate people in an appropriate manner outweigh those of studying hard on the ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'moreover', 'really', 'regarding', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'as to', 'in general', 'in particular', 'in summary', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.257785467128 0.229887763892 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.138408304498 0.158761421928 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0916955017301 0.0866891130778 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0449826989619 0.046263068375 97% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0432525951557 0.0685040099705 63% => OK
Prepositions: 0.143598615917 0.118717715034 121% => OK
Participles: 0.0415224913495 0.0351676179071 118% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.27041309519 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0397923875433 0.0309702414327 128% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0899653979239 0.0887237588012 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00519031141869 0.0209618222197 25% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0155709342561 0.0139019557991 112% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3359.0 2387.08602151 141% => OK
No of words: 519.0 408.028673835 127% => OK
Chars per words: 6.47206165703 5.86048508987 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.431599229287 0.338922669872 127% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.33140655106 0.251872472559 132% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.256262042389 0.174417080927 147% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.202312138728 0.112833075102 179% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27041309519 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552986512524 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 69.0559560641 59.2087087015 117% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 34.6 20.5533526081 168% => OK
Sentence length SD: 112.4108338 48.84282405 230% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 223.933333333 120.699889404 186% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 34.6 20.5533526081 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.06666666667 0.644075263715 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 67.740655106 45.7405998639 148% => OK
Elegance: 1.95419847328 1.45489161554 134% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.496495057687 0.300154397459 165% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.104300179711 0.103427244359 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0490331181184 0.0752933317313 65% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.522666526349 0.497263757937 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.202646294445 0.151897553556 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186177458755 0.114077575197 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147615240997 0.0781384742642 189% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.415543965755 0.336927656856 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0322309155455 0.067059652881 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.369988762772 0.210909579961 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0908179296758 0.0618886996521 147% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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