For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
School plays an essential role in the achievement of successful and secure future job and life. The ability to relate well with the everyone increase confidence in the student. However, working hard in the class will lead to endeavor future. Some people think that ability to relate well to people will give success in the future job, others would disagree. I certainly believe that studying hard in the school will increase knowledge and assure or guarantee the success in the future job.
First, people will get more knowledge by studying hard in the school. If a student works hard and tries to learn more in the class, it builds up confidence and knows all necessary information. This, in turn, helps the student to use that knowledge in the future job. For instance, when I got admission in Loyola pharmacy school, I meet with my advisor. She told me that for the better future, you need to learn the basics and strong the building of knowledge. She recommended me basic chemistry, anatomy, and physiology and explained me that these are the basic requirement and it builds up more knowledge. Eventually, when I got a job in pharmacy company, I used that basic knowledge to perform some experiments and I knew better physiology, that’s helped me in better internal human and drug interaction. So, that knowledge helps me in my job. If I didn’t listen to the advisor and took all the advanced level course, then how can I perform well in my job?
Second, study hard in the school guarantee future success because students have plenty of knowledge and information. This will definitely assure the success in future. For example, when I joined a pharmaceutical company. I noticed that the company had almost 50 pharmacists and there is very hard competition among all. I also realized that it is very hard to make your own space in this tough competition. One day during interview manager ask some topic related question and I had strong command on that topic. I answered all the questions and manager encouraged me. So, if I didn’t study hard in the school, I couldn’t answer that questions.
In the conclusion, study hard will assists students to get secure and remarkable achievement in the future job. Although the ability to relate well will strong people’s relation to others and make them confident. But the study hard in the school will lead to success in future and everyone should increase their attention toward studies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'everyone'?
Suggestion: the; everyone
...d life. The ability to relate well with the everyone increase confidence in the student. How...
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Line 2, column 812, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...er internal human and drug interaction. So, that knowledge helps me in my job. If I didn...
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Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...This will definitely assure the success in future. For example, when I joined a pharmaceu...
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Line 4, column 36, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'assist'
Suggestion: assist
...ns. In the conclusion, study hard will assists students to get secure and remarkable a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, then, well, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93253012048 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73980671987 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469879518072 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9081996098 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.88 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432933395172 0.236089414692 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122714063336 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971975180534 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302152315095 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109315617562 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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